first try at a cinematic intro...whats good, whats bad

[Machuse]

www.seniorweek05.com (http://www.seniorweek05.com)
Its an intro for senior week at my college. Its a huge event every year and contails all types of parties at the end of the year, after school is out and before graduation.

Any advice, I really want to make this the best it can be.

[RadioactveChimp]

3 words: pixelated, slow, and corny :)


but you can fix it! I think you should vecorize some of the graphics because they go too slow

[carlo2343]

very pixelated...don't get the point of it..and the "GOD SAID" things need to have a longer duration, I couldn't even read some of them because they'd come and go so fast.

[j_polo9]

yea i couldn't read one of the god said things. There doesn't really seem to be a clear message; god said that i get to rule over fish seems to be the reason why i deserver the world since that is the finishing statement... err what i mean is the ending needs to be more powerful, a better message than i get to rule over fish. The lightening effect looks a little corny, it could be effective if the lightening was more random, it looks like the same lightening keeps appearing in the same place. The white boarder around the globe at the end looks ugly you gotta clean that up, and the music when the globe is spinning is annoying.

The globe spinning effect is really cool though, and i like the text fade out effect. How did you do the spinning globe?

Also the intro reminds me of nothing of a college or senior week or anything. At least on the world spinning scene you could add some of your college logo or something.

[dale]

doesn't really give me the impression of parties. and i dont get the whole god said bit. what relevance does it have to parties?

i wanna see some party music man.

-dale

[3d Nirvana]

i didnt get the whole thing. What relavence did it have to parties? I would make it go a lot faster and make it more high energy. Also, I didnt realize that it ended when it did, i was waiting for soemthing more after the globe was there.

relavence to parties needs work. The graphics were kinda neet though. GOod Job.

3dnirvana

[unclesond]

I'm sorry, but I really didn't like that.........it looks like you've just made something and then decided to use it for an advert to a party. Where's the party context?

Why the God stuff?
What do your graphics have to do with it?

It would be better if you showed the students whats on offer for the week.....but if you want to do it in a stylish way, then get your motion tweening hat on and look at www.fakepilot.com - he is the master of quick, punchy cool presentations, and everything he designed is very related to what he is selling. Your selling your senior week, so i suggest you sell it. Sorry if that sounds cruel, but i'm trying to be constructive too

[giginger]

Sorry mate, I gave up watching it. If I hadn't read it then I would've have guessed it was for a party. I can only suggest speeding it up and losing the religious theme. I can't add any more.

[GW02]

The misspelling of "vegetation" didn't help boost my expectations. Sorry.

[MTsoul]

<3 that One Thing song.

really nice. Pretty nice flow. The music at the end is .. chopped.. a lot. Good job!

[Machuse]

Thanks for all the replies
This is my first stab at something like this so no offence taken by any of the reponces

I have to admit the words are extremly corny but...hey...college kids are easy to impress...
No just playing...the reason it has this whole Go theme is this:
Senior week is comprised of a bunch of parties one on each day, and each party will be based off a diffrent part of the world. Plus th theme for the week is "you deserve the world". Maybe the connection isnt as clear, but if you think of touringthe world in 7 days and then the theme, we brainstormed and came up with that idea.
It didnt materialize like we wanted but hey...not eveything works out the first time.
Does anyone have any other suggestions to keep the graphics (which i worked intirely to long on) but change the words?

Jpolo:
The globe was done in 3ds max, rendered as a quicktime movie then imported into flash

3dNirvana:
glad you liked the graphics, ill wrk on the other stuff

Unclesond:
thanks for the link, no need to be sorry, this isnt in any way my forte

But I have a few questions for you guys:

Radioactive Chimp:
How do I vectorize the graphics? and which ones? all of the illustrations were drawn in illustrator and exported as swfs....the words about god were all done in After effects.

What settings do you guys use when publishing music in flash, the music is perfect on my hard drive... but to keep file size down; i guess I am compressing the sound files too much. What settings do you guys use?

In general...any suggestions would be great...i know whats wrong but help me fix it lol

THANKS SO MUCH FOR ALL THE RESPONCES...KEEP THEM COMING

[Seb Hughes]

I agree with what everbody said

[SlowRoasted]

ditch the lightning, i cant stand lightning. Some people think it looks sooooo cool but i think it ruines your work and often looks like crap.

[Machuse]

yea i dont neccessarly like it either but the client specifically asked for it.

Ill protest the idea of it but...at the end of the day these kids arent designers and they just see cool movment and think wow cool
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I will be redoing the animation, i have some time on my hands and would like to do something alot better... something like what is on www.fakepilot.com

if anyone want to help or can give me any advice on how he makes those lines look 3d that would be appreciated and the favor repaid