Critique my game intro

[innoxist]

This is my first attempt at any intro, and it's for a game that me and my friends are making for a competition. Please give me any honest critique. Thank you!

>> Intro here << (http://www.geocities.com/innoxism/intro.html)

[Jasninder]

good sound fx..i like it overall but in the end when it says click here to begin..it just kills the whole fun part which an intro is supposed to provide..i dont know about the games graphics and all..how about putting some pics in background, it looks good as it is but i'd lik to see some cool text effects matching to the suspense theme.

[innoxist]

Jasninder: Thanks for the comments! Unfortunately I can't put any graphics in because we're running on a really tight schedule, and my friend who's in charge of the art (I'm hopeless at drawing, so I'm just in charge of the Flash part) is just about dying from the stress. I'll see if I can do anything about that after we're done with the entire game.

Hmm, can you suggest something about the "click here to begin" part? Because I don't really understand what you mean. And I'm also very new to intro-making, so could you elaborate more on it?

Thanks!

[Tommy_S]

Yup, the sounds are nice, but the intro lacks some graphic elements. You see?

[nipi]

Backround sound is good, but other SFX are all dry. maybe needs reverb(with cuted hi freq) and some of them little-little, but very long delay(stereo or slow-panning or 3d). some fadeouts are too short. :whistle:

[alzor]

I agree with most people really, sfx are not too bad but put some black and white photos of a ship in there or something for dramatic effect. Whats the big deal about it now, it's just some text...nothing much to review.

[[uber]]

the intro is really dry... with nothing but text... graphics are essential

[kO2n]

Haven't read other posts so apologies for anything already said.

Not bad, got a little atmosphere there with was good, one thing though, well what i would change anyway, is not the have that scream (cos for me it spoilt it) but have an image of the dead body or part of it flash up, lots of blood and guts in a quick flash is tons better than a shady scream i think.

Let us know when you complete the game!
Viru.

[~ЯאַR~}{('~]

is it my imagination or some sounds in the intro are from baldurs gate? and you should place the title of the game after the intro(thats why its an intro)

[Joppe]

I dont really like it.. Its more of an trailer then an intro i think..

[innoxist]

Didn't check back for a while, so thanks for all the crits guys!

Basically it's a high school project that we're submitting for a competition. We have about 15 days to finish it though, so it's really very rushed. I would love to develop it even more but time really doesn't allow for it.

The intro is prolly about 5% of the total work I have, so I was thinking I should work on the actual game first, then come back to this if there is time, or maybe just do some minor tweaking here and there.

But I'll definitely take all your comments into consideration. Once again, thanks a million. :)

[frost_oni]

quite cool man -- make the game live up to it :)