Illustration critique

[dravalanche]

This is something I made up couple of months ago. The hand needs a bit of re-working. What do you think?


http://img89.imageshack.us/img89/6155/walkawaypic6rs.jpg

[Joppe]

Where is the image?

[ApixDesigns]

yeah looks pretty bland...:krazy: :krazy: :krazy: :krazy: :krazy: :krazy: :krazy:

[dravalanche]

yeah looks pretty bland...:krazy: :krazy: :krazy: :krazy: :krazy: :krazy: :krazy:

Thanks for the indepth critique. But your overuse of emoticons was appreciated.

[Pasquale]

Well it looks quite flat- the linework doesnt define the shape as well as it should :)

[dravalanche]

Well it looks quite flat- the linework doesnt define the shape as well as it should :)

Could you offer some suggestions please.:}

[Pasquale]

try some cell shading and make the outer line of the character black :D

[hybrid101]

shadows and highlights:)

[DDD]

varying stroke widths as well. Not a bad start but it needs massaging

[dravalanche]

Yeah, I think I need to thicken and round the lines a bit. They look a tad too sharp. There does need to be some more shades and lighting on it. What did you exactly mean by cell shade? ( I feel dumb by asking this question)

[SelectionTool]

kindaq flat, no shadows or gradients

[Phenex]

Stroke weights and more detailing... Well actually a lot more detailing... Especially near the stomach and around the head... Give appropriately detailed highlights to the fins as well.

The pre-sketch is very proportionate though, except for that hand :P :lol:

[Pasquale]

Cell shading is like shading with solids

[Phenex]

Hmmm... What is shading with liquids and gases called?

[dravalanche]

Stroke weights and more detailing... Well actually a lot more detailing... Especially near the stomach and around the head... Give appropriately detailed highlights to the fins as well.

The pre-sketch is very proportionate though, except for that hand :P :lol:

why must you laugh at me.

[hybrid101]

Cell Shading:) (http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Cell_shading)