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SelectionTool
March 21st, 2006, 03:25 AM
Did a bit of dabbling with illustrator.I have an unfinished project I would like comments on.I would like especially to get critique on the main figure .Never went to art school or anything so pliz forgive me if the background is a bit ****y


http://www.freewebs.com/golfstix/love1.jpg
Joppe
March 21st, 2006, 04:00 AM
I like it overall, but there is something wrong with her face she seems to have a one centimetre neck. And her mouth is way too big. Other then that good work :)
hybrid101
March 21st, 2006, 05:46 AM
mouth looks bigger than normal...and the shading still makes it a bit flat. the blacks make the pic more 2d-ish. add a bit more grays:)
SelectionTool
March 21st, 2006, 06:28 AM
thanks guys , am learning as I go.Will carryout adjustments
SelectionTool
March 21st, 2006, 07:22 AM
this is just a rough before I clean up and add detail.Any better???

http://www.freewebs.com/golfstix/love12.jpg
Pixeladdict
March 21st, 2006, 07:49 AM
this is just a rough before I clean up and add detail.Any better???

http://www.freewebs.com/golfstix/love12.jpg

Personally? No.

The first version is better then this one.

I think you just need to make the mouth smile more in the 1st version and perhaps make the face thinner?
SelectionTool
March 21st, 2006, 08:00 AM
back to square one ;( :a: :crying: :crying:
_this
March 21st, 2006, 08:33 AM
NICE JOB!

:( what best program use to create illustration ?
adobe illustrator ? photoshop ? i m noob w/ this but luv.
:D
danielson
March 21st, 2006, 09:05 AM
I'd stick with the first one and add some subtle highlights to the arms so they stand out from her body a bit.

The face needs loads of work; her teeth are way too big and her lips need defining a bit more. The nose could do with some shadows/highlights too, just to give it some depth and perhaps add some colour and detail to the eyes?

Good start though!
SelectionTool
March 21st, 2006, 01:10 PM
I think I should have put in a bit more work, kinda did it in less than 3 hrs I think so I guess its more of a scribble than a fully fledged drawing , but I will take your advice onboard
ritual
March 21st, 2006, 04:05 PM
The first version is better becuase the stripes are too vibrant, I really like the background, it goes well with the whole piece.
The top of the eyes are too thick and the left elbow seems disconnected.
daleth
March 23rd, 2006, 12:37 AM
stripes could be good, just taken way way down! Shadows and highlights would be great. One thing I noticed is that the butterflies blend in to the background too easily, what if they were a different color or lightness?
Awesome!
theflash
March 23rd, 2006, 03:47 AM
eyes need to be worked on... the upper part esp...

also give some shading to the bottom of the nose...
SelectionTool
March 23rd, 2006, 04:16 AM
am working on it right now started from scratch :hitman:
musicwithcolors
March 23rd, 2006, 04:20 AM
she just looks like she had a few too many donuts. you might want to reduce the other elements too (lines, butterflies, circles). other than that great job, if you are only starting.


NICE JOB!

:( what best program use to create illustration ?
adobe illustrator ? photoshop ? i m noob w/ this but luv.
:D

for illustrations anything from pen & paper to ps. if you are talking about vector art(?) you'd probably be best off with Adobe Illustrator.
SelectionTool
March 23rd, 2006, 09:15 AM
just started yeah, first attempt at using any vector program other than flash