first logo (constructive criticism appreciated)

[esnetni]

ok this is my first logo for my friend blazes and I need a critique.
I apreciate constructive criticism cause thats the only way I will learn.
Lastly don't go say no I don't like it or some **** like that, I just want what I can fix and improve.
Well its not my first logo but my first completed one.:wasted:
Link (http://img330.imageshack.us/my.php?image=blazes816copy2xw.jpg)
Cheers.

[Anogar]

I think it's a fine start. When you're creating a logo there are a few things to keep in mind, mainly what it is going to be used for. If you intend this logo to do nothing but stick around in the upper left corner of your friend's webpage, the way you deal with the whole thing will much different than if your friend is planning on expanding his business and will need business cards, letterhead, and the like.

I recognize the temptation to play with every toy in whatever graphic tool you're using, but I personally feel that in this case, the "3D" effect you've given it is detracting. I think if you made it flat font with a bit of a drop shadow it would be stronger.

You also might consider doing 'your web resource' in small caps or lower case, that might look nice.

I personally always do logos on white, because my clients will be printing them and it'll often be white paper, but that's up to you, depending on its use.

Good start.

Cheers,

-Ryan

[applejelly]

I think Ryan has said it all.

[danulf]

yeah, he covered all of it :) I would just like to add that the text should be moved down just a little bit, it's not in the center of the graphic and it gets to me :D

[BoonDock]

It's ok, but I don't like how it's 3D and tilted at an angle so you can see the 3D of it...I think it might be better just to leave it as flat text...and is there a reason for the Tribal type thing behind it? :thumb:

[_Bruno]

agree with the guys and as danulf said, the text that is not in the center doesnt look good
'your web resource' in small caps would look better (dont like the Y as it touches the logo...)
btw, I dont think 'your web resource' would be part of the logo, thats a kind of slogan...

salut

[esnetni]

Yea its a slogan, I am fixing everything right now.

[esnetni]

New (http://img304.imageshack.us/my.php?image=newlogo9dk.jpg)
I think it looks better.
Thanks ya'll that was very helpfull.

[Pharoh32]

Did you put an outline on your text? if you did I think it might be too thick. The letters look like they're bleeding on the page. I like the second one much more than the first.

Maybe you can try to make the slogan fit to the rest of the design, but ot overpower it. The plain arial font just doesn't jive with the rest of it.

[ApixDesigns]

looks alot like you just used a picture of a biohazard thing and edited it...

[3Dean]

I agree with what Ryan and Bruno said.

The only other thing is that if you do decide to keep the 'your web resource', I could hardly read it and had to get nearer the screen.

Apart from that, good start